The Noise of Endless Wars, Chapter 12 (first draft)

[slipjig3]

Chapter 12

And then there was a huge explosion, and everybody died. The End.


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Hrmm. That might need a bit of a rewrite. On the other hand, it'll save loads of time on chapters 13 through 17. Let me ponder this a while....

And apropos of nothing, I've got a zit on my left eyelid. This is decidedly unpleasant.

Comments

[chris-walsh.livejournal.com]

What, no rocks falling?

[fiddledragon]

yes, rewrite, please

*cheer cheer cheer* :D

[ewin.livejournal.com]

Chapter 13

Deep in the primordial murk, a tiny pre-cellular structure was stirring...

[slipjig.livejournal.com]

*sighs* *deletes second draft*

[slipjig.livejournal.com]

I'll get there. This is a seriously talky chapter, as will be the next one, so I'm trying to keep this from getting eye-crossingly boring.

[slipjig.livejournal.com]

Aiee. But I don't wanna write a James Michener novel!

[rubian77.livejournal.com]

*pets you*

If I can do NaNoWriMo, you can do this. *shakes pompoms back at'cha*

[maverick-weirdo.livejournal.com]

And she gasps out just before the explosion "I did it for Johnny!"

[celtic_maenad]

GIP. Just because.

[antsswarm.livejournal.com]

Hey man, hot stye. LOVE IT ON YOU. Air smooches! --Ant

[daev.livejournal.com]

Who's Johnny? Answer me, Debbie, who's Johnny?

[weyrdbird.livejournal.com]

~Many miles away there's a shadow on the door of a cottage on the shore of a dark scottish laaaaaaake...many miles awaaaayyyy....~

No, wait, that's the police. XD

We know you can do better than Sting, and we love you.

[odheirre.livejournal.com]

As long as Chapter 13 introduces a whole new group of characters investigating the huge explosion, sounds boffo! :-).